For English Class, I had to seek three “about me” webpages and analyse them. To analyse what other people did, is very important. To criticize others gives me the opportunity to know how I would like to present myself on my own “about me” page.
1) Jay Eckles
WEB DESIGN
Commentary:
- Good structure: He divided its Biography into 3 parts
- Ice-breaker: Personal information at the beginning. His hobby is woodworking: shows that he is creative (he put a link, where you can see his work)
- He uses many action verbs: I discovered, I decided, I graduated, I served, …
- A photo would be nice
- In Education: “And, no kids, that’s not an online degree”: First I did not understand this line. The whole text is written very professional. Jay should remove this line, or rewrite it in better English.
ARTIST
Commentary:
- Short About me: Just where she was born and the different degrees she obtained. But there are some good links to her long version resume (mainly with her exhibits and publications)
- Other links as “100 fun facts to tell about me”: Interesting site, which give personal information and let know a bit of her personality. She also has an “artist blog”. http://www.elisetomlinson.com/blog/index.html : very nice
- She gives some good illustrations (prove her work, and style) in her “artist statement” which is just next to the “About me”. There she answers to the question: Why do I paint? Why did I choose this work?
TECHNICAL ARCHITECT
Comments:
- Structure: Current position, then his career and the companies he had worked for. (Logos: good idea!), links to his resume, CV, patents! And at the end a brief description of his current position.
- I think the layout of this page is very good. Nice colors, nice photo/illustration…
- He puts links very good: every where he needs to prove what he have accomplished and where he did it.
- But it is his internet page. He shouldn’t write his biography in the third person.
